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Telltale Marks

Your bedsheets left wrinkles in my skin
That I trace slowly with the tip of my finger
(it feels so early, being up before noon.)

I watch you sleep, golden lashes brushing round cheeks
The morning sun filters through the curtains
(it looks like a halo around your head.)

A brief flash of my closet romantic
I unplug the alarm clock
(no need for reality to interrupt.)

I know you're not really asleep
That half smile, faintly dancing on your lips gives you away
(i know you too well.)

I let you pretend anyway,
It's all part of the game we play.
(like children we make believe.)

Your fingers tug at my own
Invitation and plea to stay home
(i whisper your name.)

I'm a coward. A masochist with your happiness
I'll leave before our "just friends" sham falls apart
(no traces left but memories)

Your bedsheets left wrinkles in my skin
That I trace slowly with the tip of my finger
(our secrets leave wrinkles deep within.)
©2006-2009 ~DarkWarlord10k
:icondarkwarlord10k:

Author's Comments

Co-written with ~Kagey-chan for the ~poetrycafe contest.

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:iconink-is-blood:
I enjoyed this. ^_^ It was a really cool format.
:icondarkwarlord10k:
Thanks.

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"I've actually never eaten a deer, but I would totally shoot one" - ~Astrological-Bastard
:iconparanoidandroid22:
It didn't flow...the () statements didn't fit in the poem at all.
mediocre at best

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"An eye for an eye only ends up making the whole world blind."
~Mahatma Gandhi
:icondarkwarlord10k:
It also won the contest sweetheart. Learn to take criticism and stop being a spiteful bastard. The parenthetical statements were a side note, speaking as opposed to the descriptive dialogue. You're pretty hypocritical considering your signature.

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"I've actually never eaten a deer, but I would totally shoot one" - ~Astrological-Bastard
:iconparanoidandroid22:
I just thought the whole context of the poem is immature...but what was I expecting from someone who looks for the bad in everything. Oh, and by the way, "sweetie" they give those poetry.com awards to anyone. It's a money making scheme. Congrats!

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"An eye for an eye only ends up making the whole world blind."
~Mahatma Gandhi
:icondarkwarlord10k:
It wasn't a poetry.com contest love, it was a dA contest, judged by fellow writers in the art community. Why don't you read about something before you comment. I don't look for the bad in anything, I usually give fantastically encouraging comments to works I feel deserve them, yours didn't. You were blabbing on about it in #thumbsshare, and I expected a lot more.

And do you even know what the context of the poem is?

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"I've actually never eaten a deer, but I would totally shoot one" - ~Astrological-Bastard
:iconparanoidandroid22:
I'm sick of arguing...you have no idea what good poetry is....your poetry sucks...leave me alone. I never asked you to comment on it. I just wanted people to read it. so....yes.....goodbye forever Dark Warlord????

I apologize that we got off on the wrong foot...you probably are a great warlord. but the mediocre at best line was really bitchy...so I was hurt and felt the need for revenge. I understand it was hypocritical...and I apologize for that as well. so on any good terms that are left.................goodbye forever.

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"An eye for an eye only ends up making the whole world blind."
~Mahatma Gandhi
:iconnibblekat:
Very, very beautiful. I've been there, in a similar bed with a similar sun and that very familiar game.

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When I hear somebody sigh "Life is hard" I'm always tempted to ask "Compared to what?"
:icondarkwarlord10k:
Your comment is a poem unto itself :)

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"I've actually never eaten a deer, but I would totally shoot one" - ~Astrological-Bastard

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